I need poetry/writing tips.

[wyy]

I’ve been interested in writing/poetry for a bit and here is some of the stuff I’ve written. Id anybody has any tips to make my work sound more fluid and appealing please write them down.

"her teeth, tinted by the embrace of her addiction, still showcased a captivating smile; and within me, the bitter tang of kalopsia lingered."



“her sweet embrace was selcouth; warm and comforting, a hug i’ve been longing for since i could remember”



“the only reason i longed for her was not because of the times we had; it was only ever vorfreude.”

All my life l've been the ugly one. The weird one. The black sheep as they say, l've never known what it feels like to be beautiful or to be comfortable in your own skin, I’ve come to peace with it but it bothers me everyday. Like a stray dog to dirty water all l've ever wanted was beauty. The toxicity of human and creation. I am no more than ugly man, a soul in a hideous shell. I hate myself and what i may be. God. Let me be beautiful.

 

[niggacum492139]

dnr fuck nigga

 

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[Deleted member 43881]

single words or phrases don’t make a good sentence but it’s the it’s the sentence structure that matters

i hate when people use complex synonyms in writing without the structure for it. Structure matters, not unknown words

the goal isn’t to lengthen the text but to give a concise precise descriptive story by art

her teeth, tinted by the embrace of her addiction, still showcased a captivating smile; and within me, the bitter tang of kalopsia lingered.

i would’ve wrote this:

Her teeth held an addicted tint that showed when she smiled. Objectively ugly—but deluded—I adorned it.

 

[wyy]

single words or phrases don’t make a good sentence but it’s the it’s the sentence structure that matters

i hate when people use complex synonyms in writing without the structure for it. Structure matters, not unknown words

the goal isn’t to lengthen the text but to give a concise precise descriptive story by art

i would’ve wrote this:

Her teeth held an addicted tint that showed when she smiled. Objectively ugly—but deluded—I adorned it.

Bettttt appreciate it bro ik def look into it. You got snap?

 

[imabetanumale]

How can you feel emotions towards women knowing they only care about Beauty, there Is nothing deep about It.

 

[wyy]

How can you feel emotions towards women knowing they only care about Beauty, there Is nothing deep about It.

I have a girl