Message to my (ex...) girlfriend

[Yuno_howitez]

i tried to make u laugh
i tried to make it right
i tried to get a smile
but instead i make u cry
we'll feel nothing like the start
u just slipped out from my arms
i could never let u go
when i still have ur heart

 

[Yuno_howitez]

Please, come back to me. my chest hurts, oh god it still hurts after 4 days! I cant take it, she was like my momma. she was always comforting me, now i got noone!

 

[Deleted member 23359]

Mogs me

 

[MongolTurk]

i tried to make u laugh
i tried to make it right
i tried to get a smile
but instead i make u cry
we'll feel nothing like the start
u just slipped out from my arms
i could never let u go
when i still have ur heart

Poetmaxxing

 

[Yuno_howitez]

Poetmaxxing

Mogs me

i went thru pain in my life. i went thru fucked up shit. i lost another girl got cheated on

but it never hurt like this. i was gonna be gone from this website.. oh yeah, the blackpill? never again. but she betrayed me
she AFFIRMED my thoughts on reality. She confirmed everything....

 

[MongolTurk]

i went thru pain in my life. i went thru fucked up shit. i lost another girl got cheated on

but it never hurt like this. i was gonna be gone from this website.. oh yeah, the blackpill? never again. but she betrayed me
she AFFIRMED my thoughts on reality. She confirmed everything....

The truth never leaves, it’s so over

 

[kyb]

dont know what to do no more, i really just dont got a clue no more.

 

[Deleted member 30892]

1 that poem has incorrect form
2 its cringe
3 don’t come back to someone who left you so seriously ask her if she wanna talk or some shit

 

[Yuno_howitez]

1 that poem has incorrect form
2 its cringe
3 don’t come back to someone who left you so seriously ask her if she wanna talk or some shit

i think it was true love though soulmate type shit innit bozo

 

[rl⠀]

i tried to make u laugh
i tried to make it right
i tried to get a smile
but instead i make u cry
we'll feel nothing like the start
u just slipped out from my arms
i could never let u go
when i still have ur heart

All great artists were born from heartbreak

 

[cutie_pie]

1 that poem has incorrect form
2 its cringe
3 don’t come back to someone who left you so seriously ask her if she wanna talk or some shit

Youre allowed to break structure sometimes, it’s not set in stone. But it is a shit poem and a bad joke

 

[Yuno_howitez]

1 that poem has incorrect form
2 its cringe
3 don’t come back to someone who left you so seriously ask her if she wanna talk or some shit

All great artists were born from heartbreak

Youre allowed to break structure sometimes, it’s not set in stone. But it is a shit poem and a bad joke

why is it a shit poem? i did my best

 

[cutie_pie]

why is it a shit poem? i did my best

I know youre joking around buddy. No blackpiller would write a gf that dumped him a poem

 

[Yuno_howitez]

I know youre joking around buddy. No blackpiller would write a gf that dumped him a poem

on god i did, and im still begging her everyday to get back with me

 

[Deleted member 20399]

You really are a cuck brk

 

[cutie_pie]

on god i did, and im still begging her everyday to get back with me

Cope. Youre not that cucked

 

[rl⠀]

why is it a shit poem? i did my best

This is just your start. Your artistic beginning. No sarcasm. But try and be a little more unique next time.

 

[Yuno_howitez]

You really are a cuck brk

idc

 

[Yuno_howitez]

Cope. Youre not that cucked

i swear to god dawg. i just sent her something on discord as well cuz she blocked me from instagram, her number and facebook

 

[Yuno_howitez]

Cope. Youre not that cucked

i will tag you.

 

[cutie_pie]

i will tag you.

i swear to god dawg. i just sent her something on discord as well cuz she blocked me from instagram, her number and facebook

Mirin @Crestfallen95 -maxxing

 

[Deleted member 30892]

i think it was true love though soulmate type shit innit bozo

Whatever happened its over g

But if its not cheating/betrayal and just a loss of attraction you have slight chance to get her back but not with a poem

 

[UglyItalian]

She probably left you because you do shit like this

 

[blackpilled I lost]

1 that poem has incorrect form
2 its cringe
3 don’t come back to someone who left you so seriously ask her if she wanna talk or some shit

Your profile picture reminds me of anal sex somehow

 

[Deleted member 30892]

why is it a shit poem? i did my best

You should follow the traditional form of poetey until you’re advanced enough to do things the way you like

Most poems are written in alexandrins, basically 12 pronounced syllables per line, with 4 lines rhymes schemes either in ABBA or ABAB

Other than that you should focus on abstract metaphors and avoid repetition of words ("I" 3 times in a row) unless it brings enough value to the poem’s meaning to counter the inconvenient of repetition