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[jeff22]

Wasteful endurance of mortal hysterics upon the rough ice shelves!​

 

[jeff22]

its a fragment its not all that much

 

[aklifaal]

its shit

 

[jeff22]

its shit

thx

 

[aklifaal]

thx

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Hero Eternal

Your name; martyr! Your shroud; the Fatherland, Your coffin; the world, Think and be proud, Your fame lives on. The blood in your vein, Is that a flame? Your life; a novel, Your death; a poem. For you, there is not a stone, Nor a tomb, This life; a war, Forever goes on… Your equal, This...

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[jeff22]

what u think about mine

Hero Eternal

Your name; martyr! Your shroud; the Fatherland, Your coffin; the world, Think and be proud, Your fame lives on. The blood in your vein, Is that a flame? Your life; a novel, Your death; a poem. For you, there is not a stone, Nor a tomb, This life; a war, Forever goes on… Your equal, This...

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I actually enjoyed it, I would have liked more imagery but its just more personal taste

 

[takethewhitepill]

Heres my poem

Brown.
My t50 eyes.
My unwashed skin.
The poop from my butt,
Fills my room and my river.
My river,
My holy river,
Brown.
The food I eat.
The water I drink.
All around me,
Brown.

 

[jeff22]

Heres my poem

Brown.
My t50 eyes.
My unwashed skin.
The poop from my butt,
Fills my room and my river.
My river,
My holy river,
Brown.
The food I eat.
The water I drink.
All around me,
Brown.

tragic

 

[caleb555]

Rate mine

As christmas nears,
I give joyfull cheers.
Outside a cold breeze,
The icicles freez.

 

[jeff22]

Rate mine

As christmas nears,
I give joyfull cheers.
Outside a cold breeze,
The icicles freez.

fire.

 

[jeff22]

its a fragment its not all that much

isnt a finished peice tho