Rate the poem that i wrote recently

[Deleted member 6856]

I loved you more than you can beleive, you brunette girl
In this salted tear struggling in my eyelash
There's no place for treachery, there's no place for treachery
What can you do, they're closing in
Good-bye for now, my wild flower
A police officer is nearing with his legal bullet

Working on it tbh

 

[Deleted member 4645]

dn so here are 3 possible answers

yes
maybe
idk

 

[Deleted member 6856]

dn so here are 3 possible answers

yes
maybe
idk

It was rating bro

 

[Deleted member 7866]

Shit poem

 

[Deleted member 6856]

Shit poem

What makes it shit tbh

 

[Deleted member 7125]

There's no place for treachery, there's no place for treachery

xD

 

[nastynas]

wtf a police officer has to do with your cucked love story

 

[Deleted member 6856]

wtf a police officer has to do with your cucked love story

I'm in trouble
A guy got shot in the street,
My adress is found in his pocket
I'm in trouble
I forgot my pistol in the toilet
It's utter inconsistency, it's utter inconsistency,
It's completely stupid
I'm in trouble

 

[Deleted member 7866]

What makes it shit tbh

All of it

No rhymes too

 

[Deleted member 4645]

I read it now, is this about a romantic erectus?

A police officer is nearing with his legal bullet

 

[EdouardManlet]

Here's one about the Norwood Reaper:

Fight as you might with finasteride,
Hanging on to those follicles with the time that you bide,
But in the end it don’t matter there’s no getting away,
He’ll take those hairs by force, yes he’ll take em away,

When the Norwood Reaper comes for you,
When the Norwood Reaper comes for you,

From the bums in the street, to the folk on the hill,
It don’t matter who you are when he goes for the kill,
One swipe with his scythe, and you’re all out of luck,
Two more and you’ll start to resemble fryer tuck,

When the Norwood Reaper comes for you,
When the Norwood Reaper comes for you,

You try combing it over maybe no one can tell,
But you look like a fool with a tub full of gel,
So you finally give in and shave your head clean,
And on display for all is your big shiny bean,

When the Norwood Reaper comes for you,
When the Norwood Reaper comes for you.

 

[Entschuldigung]

I like it

 

[Deleted member 6856]

I read it now, is this about a romantic erectus?

Its about a criminal erectus bro jaahahhaha

 

[Deleted member 6856]

I like it

Finally phaggot

 

[Entschuldigung]

Finally phaggot

Finally what

 

[Deleted member 6856]

Finally what

You likemaxxed

 

[Entschuldigung]

You likemaxxed

It's because I just woke up I'm forgetting to like g