BP Poetry

[_Void]

Started to do some poetry and just wanted to share. Feel free to give honest feedback.

A sensitive young man is born,
his heart is filled with love and joy.
Full of kindness, peace and light,
his soul is graced, pure and bright.
He sees, he builds, he loves, he laughs ,
the angels weep when he cries.
He meets a wicked larping foid,
she reaps away his tender soul.

_Void

 

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[blur_el]

mirin this shit bhai

 

[Foodiepill]

this is ass

 

[dictator]

 

[_Void]

this is ass

mirin this shit bhai

Thanks bro

 

[soapbubble]

A sensitive young man

 

[_Void]

this is ass

thanks for the feedback could you share what I can improve on

 

[Foodiepill]

thanks for the feedback could you share what I can improve on

idk I'm not really into poetry and I was just hating. Keep practicing ig

 

[_Void]

idk I'm not really into poetry and I was just hating. Keep practicing ig

Alright totally get it. All good.